ArchuArchie

Updated a brand new chapter of
          	
          	MAYAVI PREMINI
          	
          	HER BABY SHOWER

InkWithPoison

*Plot wise is strong
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InkWithPoison

About the Devil Princess; I like the plot, it's very interesting. I really want to love it but the dialogues are starting to sound the same and a little more towards word vomit-ish as the exchange felt written than lived by actual characters so l find it challenging as a reader to get fully immersed into the story.
          	  
          	  Plot wise is  just the dialogue is hard to distinguish and fully get into with so many characters and the omniscient writing all throughout. I always feel dizzy after each chapter because of it because I really travel through the stories in my mind. 
          	  
          	  Cause genuinely read word by word and try to give as transparent comments as much as I can but the latest chapter has really been a challenge and I don’t want to give false compliments as you worked so hard to write it.
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InkWithPoison

@ArchuArchie Thank you so much for taking it positively. The plot is really interesting. And I do believe your characters can definitely get fleshed out better when show and tell are done in balance, and the transition to one place to another is kept to a minimum to make us live through the moment more. Just being allowed to sit with the character’s thoughts and feelings would make us feel closer to them.
          	  
          	  Of course, your style is your style and I respect that. Just wanted to share my thoughts in a safer environment. And to be transparent why my comments are lesser than usual. 
          	  
          	  Again, your story is really interesting and I am happy to get introduced to it.
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ArchuArchie

Updated a brand new chapter of
          
          MAYAVI PREMINI
          
          HER BABY SHOWER

InkWithPoison

*Plot wise is strong
• Reply

InkWithPoison

About the Devil Princess; I like the plot, it's very interesting. I really want to love it but the dialogues are starting to sound the same and a little more towards word vomit-ish as the exchange felt written than lived by actual characters so l find it challenging as a reader to get fully immersed into the story.
            
            Plot wise is  just the dialogue is hard to distinguish and fully get into with so many characters and the omniscient writing all throughout. I always feel dizzy after each chapter because of it because I really travel through the stories in my mind. 
            
            Cause genuinely read word by word and try to give as transparent comments as much as I can but the latest chapter has really been a challenge and I don’t want to give false compliments as you worked so hard to write it.
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InkWithPoison

@ArchuArchie Thank you so much for taking it positively. The plot is really interesting. And I do believe your characters can definitely get fleshed out better when show and tell are done in balance, and the transition to one place to another is kept to a minimum to make us live through the moment more. Just being allowed to sit with the character’s thoughts and feelings would make us feel closer to them.
            
            Of course, your style is your style and I respect that. Just wanted to share my thoughts in a safer environment. And to be transparent why my comments are lesser than usual. 
            
            Again, your story is really interesting and I am happy to get introduced to it.
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ArchuArchie

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          A university that looks completely normal on the surface… but beneath it lies a world of secrets—illegal activities, drugs, and human trafficking.
          
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          But who is this old man?
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          If you’re intrigued and want to uncover the mystery behind him, you NEED to binge-read this story. Trust me, it’s worth it.
          
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lostlovefairy

Sounds interesting
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