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YSMaya
howyoudoing
Yk mai bahut din se soch rhi hu aapki story padhne ke baare me lekin himmat nahi ho rhi hai kyuki maine ek snow white ka dark version padha hai uske trauma se abhi Bahar nhi nikal paa rhi hu (ToT)(ToT)
YSMaya
@howyoudoing I m not sure now what to say...its drama and traumatic though...read at ur risk...read initial chapter and then think if its something of ur liking then continue or leave it...
RahbReader
How many chapters u have draft? U published pretty soon.
Another, will it be okay if I ask u about making a compilation of things for ur writing, from a reader's perspective?
I see a couple of things in the chapters and have some thoughts about the writing. Not that it's horrible but to improve it. (Don't take it the wrong way." So only if I have ur approval...
And if u agree, u sort of need to give info about how u write, how , think of ideas, what goes in ur mind will u type the words, sentenced, the conversation. How long does it take?
Not trying to invade. Only if u permit.
YSMaya
Actually there are many scenes which happened in real life and obviously many are just imagination. I cant say exactly which ones cuz its someone else life I took inspiration from.
YSMaya
@RahbReader yup ofcourse ill be more than happy. Actually I have hectic schedule and things are not good in my personal life. So this writing and reading is kind of escapism from reality. So when ever I get time even its too late I write. Actually I have already written these stories before its just I have published them now thats why it does not take time for me. And also I have already written another few stories its just ill first complete this then publish them. U can ask more...?
yuwaalovess
Hey it's yuwaawritess followed you from my another id
RahbReader
Y did U follow me? Any particular reason?
RahbReader
@RahbReader I didn't follow u. Must have been some touch mistake so that calls for an unfollow.
YSMaya
@RahbReader ok u can but ill still follow cuz u have been reading and commenting which motivated me alot. Thanks...
RahbReader
@YSMaya I meant u should unfollow when I said "call for an unfollow" as I didn't find you in my following list. Gosh it got awkward.
RahbReader
Ok so I'll say it here.
Hello,
I wanted to write you earlier when you said that you would prefer to have opinions and feedbacks to write and improve your story, but I didn't because you just just your first story (I guess) and didn't want to make it look like I know your story better then you.
But seeing the chapter 'chocolate smile' where Sandhiya was having a actual good time with her family is not looking good. It's not about your writing abilities and skill, it's how thinks reached to this point despite what happened to Sandhiya and how it's going with her family.
This story has an expectation of being a healing and reclaimeing one's self but as you said that Sandhiya is trying to mend with her family is not good part. Not that it doesn't served the story, the issue is how can one try to mend with the person who caused them such harm.
(I know it's so soon of me to make assumptions or jump into conclusions and you might have things sort out for your story, at least just hear me out)
Again I get it, Sandhiya wants to let her self go free from the pain but it can't just simply go like this. Sandhiya saw her sister, thigh cousin but they she didn't treated her cousin any less. Sandhiya always saw Anhita as her own and she found out that very same sister of her that she selflessly gave her effort, affection even her own mother, she finds out her sister is with her fiance. Not just over a text, not any pic, not any video, not seeing her at some random restaurant being cuddly with her fiance but in her apartment, in her bed with her fiance. This can't be mend, things can't be same, the sister bind can't be same even if Sandhiya let the last be past.
RahbReader
@RahbReader 2. Also I'm just getting little anxious about next ch, as it's about school friends union and Sandhiya will be there. I guess all the questions about her past engagement will pull up. Just have a hunch nothing good will happen there.
RahbReader
@YSMaya right it won't change in one day but even if it does (I can't even name it same as there's nothing good to begin with) it just can't be all happy and well going. With how Sandhiya is she won't make a decision to leave the house and cut off the family (not even her mother or sis). The things that going among Sandhiya and her mom and sis in such a casual manner and laughing like nothing happened can't coexist with the cheating and ignored incident. No matter how Sandhiya tries to let all that go but the effect that had long ago taken over her, she's just living with it because she has no option or the courage (that's her weak point).
RahbReader
Do you have insta id? I couldn't find when I typed YSmaya.
yuwaawritess
Heyy we talked on reddit i followed you (◕ᴗ◕✿)
secretsofpj
Hey author !
Just read your story . It's really good so m gonna keep reading. All the best for this ❤️❤️.
PJ
YSMaya
@secretsofpj Thank you so much...it made my day...even for 1 reader i will continue...thanks...
YSMaya
Hey my new story...starting fresh please show support...
https://yamur.dijitalkalp.com/story/411781263